Working with Kyan on writing

Kyan and I are working on planning his story. Moving house.

My holiday story

 I have started to use great verbs and wow words and speech marks

Lloyd's birthday

First I had not enough details but I went back and aded more details to make my writing more interesting we use magnifying glass to find details. Can you spot my glasses?

My Writing Goal

Minecraft Attack

Today in Writing my goal was to put lots of WOW words in my story.  I used words like epic and tremendous to make my work more exciting for the reader.